Right now, I'm in the process of revising each chapter one at time, typing them out to check for errors and anything I want to change. Though I glanced at what I had printed so far and food some spelling errors and missing words I didn't catch the first time (though I knew I'd probably made some), meaning there will still be more rewriting and revising to be done thereafter. Proofing is always part of the process. I've gotten up to Chapter 14 in my current round of revisions and now have to work on revising Ch. 15 and the epilogue. I'm trying to decide if I need or want to include an introduction and an afterword. and I'm already wondering who to acknowledge, since most of the people I want to mention in this part have been disguised in the text, and should I use their real names in the acknowledgements.
My use of dialogue has been a little sparse, since trying to remember exact quotes is a bit hard. Some may have been exaggerated so that I can have some dialog in the story. I have read some memoirs that have only so much dialogue.
Does pacing mean following a timeline? I've said before on my blog that I did not describe incidents a timeline, but rather by subject. For example, one chapter is devoted to the year 2001, how I was fired from a job in the days leading up to 9/11. Another chronicles things I wanted to do but were never able to. This one has occurred so many times in my life I felt a need to lump them together into a single chapter.
I have been watching how I have written my sentences, trying to keep them from being too long and containing too many commas. When this is the case, I try to break them into two or more sentences. I've also ben trying to break long paragraphs down into more than one, if possible.